Wednesday 7 March 2012

Autumn

When I go outside I see...
a gust of wind,
a shimmer on the falling leaves.
Trees are flying and dancing in the wind.
My hair is swishing in the breeze.
It's soft and gentle like it should be.
it looked alive in the leaf tornado.
It looked cloudy and it was breezy.
It looked magical.
The trees looked like they were prancing and dancing.
Now that is a real autumn day!


By Jodie-Anne

17 comments:

  1. Well done me!
    from jodie

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  2. well done jodie intresting words from naomi

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  3. I like how you used the word shimmer - Mrs French

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  4. I love the words u uesed from emma

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  5. I like how you used magical from riley

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  6. i like your description from olivia

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  7. good job from finn

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  8. I like the word magical

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  9. hi jodie me again naomi I like how you said a gust of wind

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  10. good work jodie. I like the describing words. From abbey

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  11. Your writing is interesting by Sam Williams

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  12. I love my story!
    from jodie

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  13. hi jodie i like your writing love from naomi

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  14. Lovely Jodie-Anne, made me feel like wrapping up warm !!!!

    From nanny xxxx

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  15. So proud of your writing Joie-Anne, amazing keep up the good work XXXXXXXXX

    From mummy :-)

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  16. Jodie-Anne I have shared the link with all of your family in the UK so they can see how wonderful your writing is :-D
    From Mummy XXX

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  17. Well done Jodie we are so proud of you and the way that you used your words to give a real feeling of Autumn Love Nanny and Grandad in Suffolk XXXXXXXXXXX

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