Wednesday, 7 March 2012

Autumn

It was very cold outside.  
I was shivering.  
There were leaf tornados.  
The leaves were flying.  
The trees are dancing and jiggling.


By Finn
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14 comments:

  1. Anonymous7 March 2012 at 16:13

    Hi Finn. This is a very nicely constructed poem. I really like the way you have used words to paint a very clear picture of an autumn day.

    Mr Newton

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  2. Anonymous7 March 2012 at 19:52

    great poem finn.
    jodie-anne

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  3. msbee10 March 2012 at 00:54

    I love the image you have created by the use of the term "leaf tornado"... It really puts an image in my mind of leaves swirling and twirling...

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  4. Anonymous11 March 2012 at 23:07

    well done finn this is a GREAT poem I really enjoyed reeding it on the room 10 blog!!

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  5. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:26

    This is a cool poem from fergus

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  6. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:33

    Love the words you used-jodie-anne

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  7. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:36

    hi finn I like story from william

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  8. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:41

    hi finn naomi here love your words that you used Naomi

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  9. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:42

    AWSOME FINN YOUR MY BEST FRIEND
    FROM SAMUEL DC

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  10. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:43

    Finn you are good writing. Alex

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  11. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:47

    i like it-tremain

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  12. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:47

    good story-russell

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  13. Anonymous14 March 2012 at 00:02

    Hi Finn

    Great to see your writing published. I really liked your line about leaf tornadoes as this painted a fabulous picture in my mind and I knew exactly what you meant. Keep up the great writing. Mrs Wood :)

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  14. Anonymous18 March 2012 at 20:52

    Hi finn, amazing writing.I love the end part of your story.From Sam Williams

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