Wednesday, 7 March 2012

Autumn

When I go outside I see...
a gust of wind,
a shimmer on the falling leaves.
Trees are flying and dancing in the wind.
My hair is swishing in the breeze.
It's soft and gentle like it should be.
it looked alive in the leaf tornado.
It looked cloudy and it was breezy.
It looked magical.
The trees looked like they were prancing and dancing.
Now that is a real autumn day!


By Jodie-Anne
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17 comments:

  1. Anonymous7 March 2012 at 19:54

    Well done me!
    from jodie

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  2. Anonymous11 March 2012 at 13:29

    well done jodie intresting words from naomi

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  3. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:13

    I like how you used the word shimmer - Mrs French

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  4. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:24

    I love the words u uesed from emma

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  5. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:28

    I like how you used magical from riley

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  6. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:34

    i like your description from olivia

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  7. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:35

    good job from finn

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  8. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:37

    I like the word magical

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  9. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:39

    hi jodie me again naomi I like how you said a gust of wind

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  10. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:42

    good work jodie. I like the describing words. From abbey

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  11. Anonymous12 March 2012 at 13:45

    Your writing is interesting by Sam Williams

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  12. Anonymous13 March 2012 at 17:23

    I love my story!
    from jodie

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  13. Anonymous14 March 2012 at 23:16

    hi jodie i like your writing love from naomi

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  14. Anonymous14 March 2012 at 23:39

    Lovely Jodie-Anne, made me feel like wrapping up warm !!!!

    From nanny xxxx

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  15. Anonymous27 March 2012 at 23:44

    So proud of your writing Joie-Anne, amazing keep up the good work XXXXXXXXX

    From mummy :-)

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  16. Anonymous27 March 2012 at 23:52

    Jodie-Anne I have shared the link with all of your family in the UK so they can see how wonderful your writing is :-D
    From Mummy XXX

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  17. Anonymous28 March 2012 at 12:34

    Well done Jodie we are so proud of you and the way that you used your words to give a real feeling of Autumn Love Nanny and Grandad in Suffolk XXXXXXXXXXX

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