Wednesday 7 March 2012

Autumn

It was very cold outside.  
I was shivering.  
There were leaf tornados.  
The leaves were flying.  
The trees are dancing and jiggling.


By Finn

14 comments:

  1. Hi Finn. This is a very nicely constructed poem. I really like the way you have used words to paint a very clear picture of an autumn day.

    Mr Newton

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  2. great poem finn.
    jodie-anne

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  3. I love the image you have created by the use of the term "leaf tornado"... It really puts an image in my mind of leaves swirling and twirling...

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  4. well done finn this is a GREAT poem I really enjoyed reeding it on the room 10 blog!!

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  5. This is a cool poem from fergus

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  6. Love the words you used-jodie-anne

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  7. hi finn I like story from william

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  8. hi finn naomi here love your words that you used Naomi

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  9. AWSOME FINN YOUR MY BEST FRIEND
    FROM SAMUEL DC

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  10. Finn you are good writing. Alex

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  11. i like it-tremain

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  12. good story-russell

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  13. Hi Finn

    Great to see your writing published. I really liked your line about leaf tornadoes as this painted a fabulous picture in my mind and I knew exactly what you meant. Keep up the great writing. Mrs Wood :)

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  14. Hi finn, amazing writing.I love the end part of your story.From Sam Williams

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